As some of you know I am in my last year in college and I'm searching for jobs. Ack, I know. Anyhow I have been working on my cover letter but because I am on my spring break, campus buildings are closed; therefore I can't visit the career center to as for suggestions. That is why I'm here.

I am applying for a fashion internship for one of my local magazine, and I could use for advice on how to improve my cover letter.

Here is the cover letter for the position: (Note: I have put blank spaces to any facts that show where I live. Other sugar members knowing what I look like from my recent post is enough. Lol. )

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Dear Ms. __________:

Fashion and journalism are two passions of mine since my early teen years. I have shown immense interests for fashion through my writing. You can even say I live and breath fashion and writing.

I am applying for the summer fashion internship position at ________ Magazine. I found out about this great opportunity through the magazine’s website. I chose _________ Magazine because of its coverage on the city’s culture and lifestyle.

I have four years of journalistic experience in both magazine and newspaper. I am currently a volunteer staff writer for a ________ University newspaper called __________. As a staff writer, I have had the opportunity to show my creative side by pitching in stories of my own such as the places to shop and dine in ________, a campus fashion show and a jazz series program held at the _______ Public Library. My latest project in the newspaper is writing about the street styles of _______ college students.

I am also an intern at a ________-based marketing and communication agency, _________. I work closely with the public relations department. Although what I do has no relations to journalism, I believe that my public relations experience will also prepare me as a fashion intern. In my internship I was responsible for contacting local and national publications and businesses, writing press releases and assisting with the ________ _____ _____ ________re-election campaign like creating a monthly schedule for him.

Additionally I was a freelance reporter for ____ ______ _______. This position gave me the chance to work under a wonderful editor, ___ __________, who has taught me to be a journalist professionally. With my freelance experience, I have gained interviewing and reporting skills that will guide me throughout my journalistic endeavors.

I am confident that my combination of great writing skill, creativity, practical work experience and educational background in journalism has prepared me for making future contributions to __________ Magazine. I will contact you to follow up on the status of my résumé but if you have any comments or questions please contact me at ___ __________.

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What I want is hard-hitting criticism. No "Oh good cover letter Pinkflats." I don't really want any of that. Let me know what you think. If you found incorrect spelling or grammar, tell me. This is a matter of life and death for me. Well okay that's was over the top.

I think my issue is that it's a bit long for a cover letter. No?